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Hey! I just posted our comic "Blakemore", I'd love some feedback from the community. Also if you follow me I'll definitely follow you back lol, I'm really looking to network and colab with some other creatives!
Heya! I'm checking out your comic and it looks really cool! Will add it to my to-read list :)
Hey there! When looking for feedback in the future, don't forget the link!
https://globalcomix.com/c/blakemore
Now to the rest of my feedback:
1. The Lettering is what stood out to me the most as far as needing feedback. It's not super consistent as far as keeping it even within the bubbles. I would also look into varying up the design/typfaces used in the SFX rather than use the same look for them each time (the round brush). Clean lettering is really important to keep the flow of the pages/reading smooth.
I would suggest looking at this lettering guide by Blambot for some of the basics: https://blambot.com/pages/lettering-tips
You can also look here for some advice on manga lettering (in the sidebar): https://github.com/saraoswald/lettering-tutorials/wiki
2. Also, are you cropping your pages down to the trim line? There's a lot of white space around the artwork.
3. The gutters between panels aren't consistent page to page. It's good that you have larger gutters top to bottom and smaller side to side, but they aren't very consistent page to page. That's a small nitpick, but it'll help you look more professional if you can make those the same for whatever you choose. It typically varies by mangaka, but the top to bottom gutters are bigger than the side to side.
4. The art itself looks nice and clean, though I noticed there is a lack of good backgrounds and establishing shots. It's important to show how characters are moving around the space you tried to establish at the beginning. It's good to have, every now and then, art that shows that information. I was really confused on the space or environment they are in, and it feels like it's just a white void. It can also help give more context to the world that we'll be exploring throughout the manga.
For example, at the end, it talks about a party, but we only see the "main" characters and very little crowds or stuff showing the party. It's better to show, not tell, so make sure to add some of those as well. Crowds are a background detail and can really help in making your world feel real and believable.
5, Character art looks good though, good diversity in shape and silhouette. Great work on adding dynamic poses and panels, as well as a mix of naname and massugu panels. The art feels very.... Bleach/Kubo stylistically. Is that intentional?
That's all I have for now, feel free to reply with questions or DM me if you want to continue in private.
Hi!
Just gave it a read, I don't have gold so was only able to get the first section. So far what I have read I really like, fun action, interesting main character (Great design btw) and the plot so far has intrigued me to want to know more about humans vs titans and how that works.
The one thing I would like to see if you were to iterate on it would be more detail on the titan's fill color. It's hard to make out the design of the titan because it's all one dark color. Maybe a 2-3 tone fill would help with the details. Not sure if it's metal, or rock, wood, shiny, smooth, etc.
Great start!
@DigitalNinja Thanks for the feedback, definitely as the story goes on more and more is going to be revealed about the Titans, they're one of the main villains in this universe. Good point about the Titans armor I hadn't realized it was hard to tell what it was made of lol
JanneKarneus thanks for adding us to your read list!
ArtCrumbs good points on everything and thanks! I will have to DM you because I really want to pick your brain on a few things and get some pointers!
Nice to meet you, Lobo!
Great to meet you too @MK-Wizard!
