Feedback on my comic

I think the idea of this is really cool, however sometimes the words don't seem to flow together, or stop is odd places to due either punctuation or placement. I would also suggest a more readable font.

As beautiful as cursive is, it's not really that legible, especially a lot of the younger generations never learned to read or write it. I think it's a great start, but some tweeks might help. Also, if some of the panels are a memory, or a dream, maybe alter them? Maybe take out the color of the memory/dream. OR maybe tint them with a specific color each time. I think that's what confused me about this, I had a hard time knowing what was reality and what wasn't.

I hope that helps! Great start so far, I'd be curious to see more or another version! : D