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Feedback on comic. Looking to improve.
Hello. I was hoping if someone could read the first couple of chapters of my comic and provide feedback on the art or the storytelling. This has been my first attempt on creating a series, and while I’m proud on completing two chapters I don’t really have a resource to get some pointers or tips from experienced people. I appreciate you for taking the time to look.
Chapter 1 - https://globalcomix.com/c/gridiron/chapters/en/1/1
Thank you for taking a look and the feedback! Yes, the idea that Dre doesn’t want to let his brother’s memory down is his motivation to keep playing, but I will definitely try to make that much clearer in future installments.
I agree that a straightforward line or two clarifying Dre’s goal is needed. I do want him to have an internal conflict on if he should keep pursuing or should he quit, but I think that added line can make it clear of what Dre wants, it’s just a matter of can he overcome the challenges to actually achieve it. Thank you for the insight!
This comic looks really good and I like the themes you're exploring in it! Keep it up :)
@JanneKarneus Thank you for taking a look! :D
This comic is incredible! I love the writing, dialogue, and artwork! Amazing work! :DD