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@Jas-G
Member since Aug 2024 β’ United States
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Manga artist currently working on the sports-drama series GRIDIRON ππ¦βπ₯
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@Jas-G
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Pppppppp
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Re: Feedback on comic. Looking to improve.
@JanneKarneus Thank you for taking a look! :D
@Jas-G
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D.J Adams
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Re: Feedback on comic. Looking to improve.
I agree that a straightforward line or two clarifying Dreβs goal is needed. I do want him to have an internal conflict on if he should keep pursuing or should he quit, but I think that added line can make it clear of what Dre wants, itβs just a matter of can he overcome the challenges to actually achieve it. Thank you for the insight!
Re: Feedback on comic. Looking to improve.
Thank you for taking a look and the feedback! Yes, the idea that Dre doesnβt want to let his brotherβs memory down is his motivation to keep playing, but I will definitely try to make that much clearer in future installments.
Feedback on comic. Looking to improve.
Hello. I was hoping if someone could read the first couple of chapters of my comic and provide feedback on the art or the storytelling. This has been my first attempt on creating a series, and while Iβm proud on completing two chapters I donβt really have a resource to get some pointers or tips from experienced people. I appreciate you for taking the time to look.Β
Chapter 1 -Β https://globalcomix.com/c/gridiron/chapters/en/1/1
Chapter 1 -Β https://globalcomix.com/c/gridiron/chapters/en/1/1