Hi! I really like the art in this one. Would it be okay for me to give you some suggestions? I think the panel to panel storytelling rocks but there are a couple of relatively simple tweaks you could use to make this even cooler
@MrSoggyPants sorry for the late reply
I think your sequential art is really good and works well at telling the story, I think that some stuff is unnecessarily overexplained.the speech bubbles could also sometimes be a bit bigger, because sometimes they were a bit illegible. Overall good work that only needs some tweaks to get better.
MikoDoodles 2 months ago
Hi! I really like the art in this one. Would it be okay for me to give you some suggestions? I think the panel to panel storytelling rocks but there are a couple of relatively simple tweaks you could use to make this even cooler
MrSoggyPants 2 months ago
@MikoDoodles: I'm in the middle of the next chapter, so any feedback you have would definitely be appreciated :)
MrSoggyPants 2 months ago
@snow122: Currently in the middle of chapter 2 :)
MrSoggyPants 2 months ago
@snow122: Writing and art are both done by myself. (i'll take your comment as a compliment, though.)
MikoDoodles 1 month ago
@MrSoggyPants sorry for the late reply
I think your sequential art is really good and works well at telling the story, I think that some stuff is unnecessarily overexplained.the speech bubbles could also sometimes be a bit bigger, because sometimes they were a bit illegible. Overall good work that only needs some tweaks to get better.