The Prize Winning Squid
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The Prize Winning Squid
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Leira Orta is on the run. She found an anomaly in a book of a star in the Celestial Constellation that appears and disappears...
JCCOMIX
@ThePrizeWinningSquid: I believe it must be cool, you have interesting world and I feel the thing already!
Though, if I were, I would finish the chapter right after she escapes, and showing the misterious guy in his office! Leaving all the readers in the middle of the things,when the tension is maximum. Let them worry: did she escape? what happens next? who is this guy? I love, you know, kliffhanger thing.
right now for me everything that happens next is reducing tension and works like something from next chapter.
ThePrizeWinningSquid
@JCCOMIX: Oh I can definitely see that. Hopefully with introducing a little more about Xavier and the connection to her father it makes you want to keep reading and anticipate just what he's going to do with Bourne for the next chapter! <3