FifiMangaka
dfang37
Well where meeting main cast members and side cast members pretty quickly 😐
YeOldeFifi
@dfang37: Viso is a big world so the intro is definitely moving fast! 😁
ExchangingConvolutedCretin
Cool idea to have this chapter focus mainly on the 3rd girl unlike the 1st chapter where you had to introduce the 2 main girlies, the main villain as well as the story(it was quite much to get through).
I think you could do a better job at your expositions. The dialogue sometimes comes off unnatural. If you're revealing information during/about an action scene you could employ a "show don't tell" technique(EG. when the slice stack has to effect on the antagonist).
Keep it up 👍🏽
YeOldeFifi
@snow122: Thank you so much!! 🙏🙏 Currently I’m just working on YOT 😊
YeOldeFifi
@snow122: thank you! I draw all the artwork myself! 😄
dfang37 1 year ago
Rou powers have more to them it seems I soo can't wait to see where you take this story, characters and world
YeOldeFifi 1 year ago
@dfang37: woohoo!! so glad you’re along for the ride! 😁✨