Release #2 - Chapter 2: "The Royal Rogue"
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Episode 2
Chapter 2: "The Royal Rogue"
3K views • May 31, 2024
Kenzi Akimoto, the self-described "Vigilante" of Glory Peak, confronts Drendith Nosferi's troupe as they attempt to obliterate the circus compound and escape from Viveform after Captain Rou and Agent Fig's pursuit of Drendith.
The battle escalates when Gammi, Drendith's menacing spectre, unleashes his dark powers onto the circus.
Commander Ender ordered Rou and Fig to rendezvous with Kenzi, their new teammate. But will she make it out of this clash alive?
ExchangingConvolutedCretin 2 days ago
Cool idea to have this chapter focus mainly on the 3rd girl unlike the 1st chapter where you had to introduce the 2 main girlies, the main villain as well as the story(it was quite much to get through).
I think you could do a better job at your expositions. The dialogue sometimes comes off unnatural. If you're revealing information during/about an action scene you could employ a "show don't tell" technique(EG. when the slice stack has to effect on the antagonist).
Keep it up 👍🏽