LustWoven
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Hi guys, just want to thank you for all the support for the manga, comment here your opinion so far, i would love to know
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Kuina and Kylie arrive at the Kingdom of Ash where they meet Mira, the Queen of Fire, and things escalate into a heated battle...
SpectreFirst
First of all, it looks like something happened to issue 2 page 12 and the rest of the issue because right part is significantly smaller in size than the left and has upscaling and/or compression artifacts.
For the story-telling aspect, well, there is a saying "If your character's enemies are weak then so is your character" and your work is a prominent example of this because punching practically helpless enemies and then cheating out of combat doesn't make your character look strong, it make your character look like a Mary-Sue. Just like balancing a combat system in a video game, planning environments and balancing combat in a comic is a very difficult process and you can’t just skip it and expect everything to turn-out fine.
Speaking of other technical aspects, it looks like issue 3 took quite a nosedive in terms of quality: character's anatomy is all over the place, body proportions constantly change, facial features slide across the face, almost every 3\4 head turn look like a skewed frontal, environments reduced to colored backdrops and most importantly, action and story dynamics is reduced to a few dynamic poses with little to no progression. You don’t have to polish your work into perfection but at least a minimally acceptable quality and consistency must be maintained and again, planning, balancing and using environments instead of backdrops is essential for an action comic; cutting corners should not harm the end product too much.
Oh, and what the hell is going on with that halfway censorship, seriously, either show everything as it is or cover everything up, doing it halfway through is extremely annoying and makes no sense whatsoever, we already heard the story about birds and bees and we already know how things are supposed to look like!
Coldwarrior12
@SpectreFirst: Thanks a lot for the detailed feedback, I appreciate you taking the time.
Regarding the partial censorship — I don’t want to show genitalia because it violates platform rules, and this series isn’t meant to be hentai. I keep everything within the guidelines, which is why some scenes are censored in a limited way.
As for Issue 3, that chapter was drawn by a different artist, and he was still new to manga-style paneling, anatomy, and consistency. The series is based on a full novel, so adapting it to manga sometimes creates challenges with pacing and storyboarding, especially for new artists.
I’m already improving the workflow for future chapters, and your critique helps me know what to focus on. Thanks again!
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Kuina is thrown into her first large-scale mission: facing dozens of men in a brutal fight for survival. But victory alone...
LustWoven
Hi guys, thank you all for the support, chapter 2 will be ready this month, hope you excited, its gonna be brutal and sexy
sneak peek in patreon https://www.patreon.com/c/knitverse
LustWoven
Hey guys, chapter 2 of the manga is in the works, I believe that by the end of September you will be able to see it. For those who can't wait, you are welcome to read the original novella that the manga is based on here at the linkhttps://www.webnovel.com/book/33256182808972405###
. You are also welcome to my Patreon https://www.patreon.com/c/knitverse, see sketches and the project before everyone else, and support me so that the manga can come as soon as possible, thank you all!
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Kuina was once just a girl , scared, silent, broken by violence.
Now she’s 27, built like steel, punching harder than her past...
Coldwarrior12
@Capricia1: yes! new chapter next week, thank you so much for the comment 🩷
Coldwarrior12
@Capricia1: Not looking for commission now friend, if you want to make something simple for the love of the game you can